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Young Homer: A Storyteller's OdysseyView game page

Become the Greek poet Homer and write your first epic story!
Submitted by The Voice of Nick (@thevoiceofnick) — 1 hour, 12 minutes before the deadline
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Results

CriteriaRankScore*Raw Score
Emotional Engagement#203.4443.444
Lasting Impression#243.6673.667
Characterization#293.7043.704
Overall#323.6673.667
Mental Engagement#333.5563.556
Overall#353.5373.537
Atmosphere#1123.1853.185

Ranked from 27 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.

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Submitted(+1)

Intriguing idea. It's hilarious to read the variations of the story cards, and the audience reviews.

Developer(+1)

Really glad you like the game! Audience reviews were a feature that I’m so happy I had the time to cram into the game- I literally put them in there about 2 hours before the deadline 😅

Submitted(+1)

Superb concept. The idea itself feels unique. Enjoyed the details and re-phrasings! Could be a PVP game).

Developer(+1)

Haha I never considered that but you’re right, I love that idea! That would be so much fun to go up against someone and compare story points. Thank you for playing and for the feedback 😀

Submitted(+1)

So much reading in silence, a little background music would have been nice, but that is my only gripe.  It's a wonderfully executed game, that has me wanted to immediately replay to beat my 66/100 score.  The help/advice system is really helpful and the art style work well for the games mood.  

Developer(+1)

Thank you so much for the feedback! I agree, I think some music/sounds could help a lot 😀 I’m so happy the game made you want to go back and try to beat your score!

Submitted(+1)

So I played it again.

Developer(+1)

Wow congrats! It’s rare that I can even get a 100 😲

And again I’m so happy you had the interest to play the game a second time! It means a lot 😀

Submitted(+1)

Unlike my audience, I felt very engaged throughout the game. I have a strong urge to go back and try and get a 100 (I'll come back later once I've played a few other games) so congrats on creating a game with addictive mechanics.

It's very well thought through - from choosing the tasks you do every day to the writing. It must have taken you a long time to write all the different versions of stories but it was worth it because it's my favorite part of the game. I had a great time reading them!

I liked that there was another character to guide you and talk to you in the game and the nightly poetry readings had great little touches, like you stumbling over some parts or the funny audience reactions at the end. Without them the game may have been bland but with them it felt like you were actually there.

My only suggestion would be to add some music and sound effects.

Looking forward to playing this again. Good work!

Developer(+1)

I’m so happy to hear that you enjoyed it! The fact that you felt the pull to do another playthrough means a lot, and I’m glad you liked all the story segments (you’re right, they did take a long time to write haha!) Music and sound effects could definitely add a lot to the game, I agree. Thank you for your wonderful review and feedback! 😀

Submitted(+1)

awesome game! I like the way the  pixel art was rendered , simple and straightforward. The mechanics is easy to understand , and the narrative is engaging , giving a good  game experience.  This has good replay value and is a well made game, Overall I enjoyed playing this one! congratulations! keep it up! 

Developer

Thank you so much!! 😀

Submitted(+1)

That is a really unique story and gameplay idea, lot of humour and randomized elements. It feels really consistent in both story and design. The artworks are minimalistic but again it feels really consistent and it feels like one of the retro text games with ASCII art. I am not sure how random is scoring system but overall "story building", and matching gameplay feel really nice. I am in general more fond of text walls instead of animated 1 sentence text fields but I guess it's mostly about personal preferences.

Awesome game :) 

Developer

Thank you so much for the review and the suggestions! As for the text crawl, maybe if you could press space bar while the text builds, to make it immediately show all the text in that block? 🤔 Do you think that might solve the issue?

Submitted(+1)

I just threw up. So this is my favorite submission I've played it, simply for the fact that it's... extremely educational. There's so much to absorb about narrative design here. Very inventive entry and great usage of our own struggles to refine our projects. So much funny stuff going on: the changing of titles, the implied ineptitude of our storytelling abilities, the reviews. I loved the gradual unveiling of refined cards, and the initial cards were always hilarious to me. It somehow seemed like the first polished versions were almost worse than the original ones, adding to the hilarity and realism.

The UI feels incredibly polished and functional. The visuals for the cards were just enough to keep it visually engaging and from feeling simply like text on a screen. One small complaint is the reviews being in two separate columns initially had me reading it a little funky, like maybe they should have been in extended lines instead of broken up side by side.

I enjoyed the gradual explanation of the deeper mechanics, and again how well it connects with the idea of our submissions. Somehow I got a 99 on the 2nd to last day but only a 91 on the final performance after only refining existing things, which is also another great connection to the development process. Sometimes our refinement can only detract from the experience that already existed. Sometimes a rough beat adds to the charm and enjoyment. Sometimes more work  put into what is already present can only remove the human qualities that make story telling such an elusive art form. All in all, this is an incredible submission that I think has so much to offer  to anyone who participates in game jams. Phenomenal work!

Developer

Thank you so much for this incredible review! I'm glad the core themes and mechanics resonated so deeply. I wanted to make something that captured what the creation process really feels like- slowly changing and changing and changing things, eventually becoming so numb to the material that we're almost unable to tell whether it's getting better at all without outside feedback. ("Writing is rewriting," as they say!) 

The insights you posed into the metaphorical meaning of many of these mechanics are extremely astute. The fact that you cared so much about the experience that you'd want to deeply explore the meanings means more to me than you can imagine. Great suggestion about the reviews screen too, I think that breaking them into two horizontal lines would be a perfect solution! 

This review is amazing. Thank you!! 

Submitted(+1)

Wait - the Odyssey was written for a poetry slam? This detail has always escaped me until now ...


This is a wild idea. And for some reason it works flawlessly. The race against the looming deadline was a lot of fun (relatable too). Since you don't know what works best at the beginning and have to work it out gradually, the game is also not that easy (at least not for me) This also provides some replay value. Especially because you don't always get the same cards from Orestes.

I had to take a break between two playthroughs. The high-contrast white on black is a bit hard on my eyes, which aren't as good as they used to be. But the plain presentation in black and white is a really clever design decision. Fits the game perfectly.

The changing descriptions of the cards are amusing, the anachronisms are fun.  And the audience "reviews" are just delightful. The writing in general is really, really good. Enjoyed that a lot. I will definitely play this some more. :)

Developer

Thank you so much for the review and thoughts! It means so much that you were interested in playing a second time after completing the game- I was hoping the randomized elements and combination of upgrade mechanics would encourage multiple playthroughs. Really happy you enjoyed the writing too. Homer’s works are very important to me, and I spent a lot of time trying to refine every little piece of text for the cards and screenplay 😀 

Your point about the high-contrast ratio being able to hurt your eyes is a great point, and something I had not considered. In a future version I’ll look into how I can add a low-contrast mode and other accessibility settings!

Submitted(+1)

Really enjoyed this. It looks quite simple but there is a lot going on here and its all very cleverly written and woven together. The audience engagement meter is addictive, and I kept willing it to go higher. Fantastic work!

Developer

Very glad the game made you want to keep striving for a higher audience rating 😀 The mechanics of that meter are something that took me a long time to get right. Thank you for the amazing review!

(+1)

Loved loved loved this. Didn't "win" the first time, which was great actually since it incentivized me to go back and play again and see a full set of completely new storycards. Amazed that you wrote 3 different iterations of each story moment in the Odyssey. And the UI was simple, manageable, and satisfying!

Developer(+1)

Wow I’m so happy you liked the game, and that you wanted to go back and play again 😀 Picking moments from the story and adapting them for the game was a really fun challenge. I was also rereading the Odyssey as I went along, and kept coming up with more new things I wanted to put in 😅 Thank you so much for your wonderful review!

Submitted(+1)

This is a very interesting entry. I loved the idea of Homer going for a poem jam, and how the build-up process closely resembles the way we all made our games.

Also the level 1 version of the cards are so silly, I laughed a few times. Very well written.

Developer

So happy you liked it! The parallel to us going through our mad dash during the creation process was a fun thread to write about 😀 Haha I’m glad you also liked the Level 1 cards. A lot of those ones are my favorites because I was able to really just go as absurd as I wanted 😅

Submitted(+1)

This is probably the most creative game I've played in the jam so far. Great prose, an interesting setup, a cool progression system that you have to strategize with. Grinding up my performance level before focusing on story cards got me above 80 points on the final day. Not handing the player an easy 100/100 victory suggests to me there's a bit going on under the hood here, I'll probably be coming back to this one. Wonderful job!

Developer(+1)

I’m very very happy to hear that you enjoyed it so much! Yes, no spoilers of how it’s working behind the scenes of course, but tuning the way the game handled the stats and difficulty was really important to me. Thank you for your review, it means a lot 😀 

Submitted(+1)

While not typically drawn to text-based games, it's evident that a considerable amount of effort was invested in making this. Gj on the writing! I can't even imagine writing so much in a game. :)

Developer

Very glad that you enjoyed the game and the writing! Yeah, it was definitely a lot of late nights in front of a giant Google Doc. Just a lot of organization to keep straight where everything was supposed to go haha 😀

Submitted(+1)

It's a nice concept for a game. Wish there was a way to have a little more control over the parts of the story to include but the game was quite original and fun

Developer(+1)

Thank you for the feedback, and I'm very glad you enjoyed the game! I'll look into ways to customize the deck further and add a little more player agency 😀

Submitted(+1)

Congratulations :-) the most original game I've played so far - and it's simply brilliant.

Developer(+1)

Wow I’m honored that you would say that! Thank you for playing, I’m so glad you liked it 😀

Submitted(+1)

Nice and unique concept! I agree that a soundtrack would make it more immersive, but overall I enjoyed playing it, great job!

Developer(+1)

Thank you so much! Definitely going to look into sound for the next version. I feel like there's a lot of fun stuff I could try with that too, based on how good his writing/performance is each night 😀

Submitted(+1)

The story is amazing goodjob, i like how simple the game is, its so good!

Developer

Thank you for playing! I’m glad you enjoyed the story 😀

Submitted(+1)

This was a very pleasant experience!

Cool that you intenionally (or not lol) mimiced the blindness with the color pallette, or lack there of.
I had fun playing this. I did miss sound effects a bit, but hey... Its a Jam-game and thats how it is.
I def think you have something to build on here!

Developer(+1)

Thank you for playing! I'm glad you picked up on the visuals emulating blindness 😀 I agree, I think sound effects could help a lot. I'll work on that for future updates! 

Submitted(+1)

Wow, you have written so much! It's a nice simplistic game that also teaches some Greek mythology. Maybe some music or tavern ambiance sounds could have made the experience even better. I didn't win the poem contest by the way. Somehow my poem actually got worse at the end even with all the polishing and practicing. Amazing entry for the jam!

Developer(+1)

Haha yes, I ended up spending a lot of my time in Google Docs for this one, just writing and refining all the different levels of card stories and screenplay stuff 😅 Thank you for the great suggestions and comments! It's interesting about the your experience with the poem getting worse. I wanted there to be a random element to the performances, but some playthroughs I felt that too, where it seemed like it became overly stacked against me. I'll work on the tuning of difficulty for the next version! 

Also I'm glad you felt that it can teach some Greek mythology- I wanted there to be a bit of real educational value in there behind the comedy and gameplay!

Submitted(+1)

The fact that you managed to accomplish this form of storytelling is impressive and intriguing, the art and font are just two of the many elements that give this submission that rounded off finished feel - I'm looking forward to what you do moving forward with this project as well as what you come up with next! It's a follow from me!

Developer

I'm so glad you like the art style of the game! This was the first of the games I've worked on where I created concept design mockups very early in the process, and then allowed many of the game design decisions to be informed by those visual targets. I wasn't sure if it was going to pay off, since I thought it might cause scope creep, but I was pleased as well with how the look turned out! 

Thank you so much for the kind words, I'm excited to keep going with this concept and build the game into something bigger and better 😀

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