You are a war beetle in stealth missions to steal sugar. All other insects want the same and will try to kill you. · By
I hope you are having fun with VotG! As you all know, my first language is Brazilian Portuguese. That means maybe you'll find one (or a few) typos in the English Version, sorry! This is a space created to show me these typos so I can correct them and you have a perfectly written game in your hands.
Thank you!
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The two sides of coins are known as Heads (note the -s) and Tails.
"succeed" is written with 2 Es, and you succeed IN an action. However, my advice would be to write "...the player is successful", instead of "...the player succeeds in the action."
Instead of "In Resume", which does not make sense in English afaik, consider "In Brief", or "In a Nutshell".
Thank you again! Already fix it! I'll wait some hours to upload the new files cause I'm almost sure new typos will appear somewhere. English is a hard language! Thank you so much again!
I've just sent you a free Boschtiary by e-mail in gratitude!
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"...a kind of bird that seems to have no feelings."
"...steal some food for the wounded."
"A human child silently enters the kitchen..."
"...sacks some Elixir cubes." Possibly takes, steals, snatches?
"...hearing a Carcori approach, the human child .... the Elixir jar open."
"...the safe thing to do is not to fly..."
