Hello, Recently I started a visual novel, is is nowhere complete but wanted peoples opinion on the ideas I had and if there is anything I can improve on in the story so far, I personally think the story is going a little fast but I would love to hear your opinion, like if it's to fast, not executed greatly or if the ideas are just horrible.  

You can find the VN at The Lost Memory Of The Ancient by BinaryGuy109 (itch.io)

The art is not mine and the credit to where it is due is in the game.

Thank you.