WOW. For such a short visual novel, this was an incredible experience – thank you! The art is stunning, but the real winner for me is the writing; I love how you've utilized perspective and wordplay to recycle previous lines in a different context, giving them a whole new meaning and thus making them more powerful and emotionally impactful for the story. Additionally, the illusion of choice further bolsters the feeling of entrapment and repetition of the interwoven world of dream and reality created by the MC's longing for perfection and appeasement, as well as fear of disappointment and failure. The music helps create a suffocating atmosphere, fitting the MC's stressful and overworked lifestyle. Few grammar mistakes, but not story-breaking. Well done! 9/10
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