I agree with this, I can barely get anything done while keeping up with the main story.
But maybe this is intentional since a lot of stuff changes the dialogue for later playthroughs. And it gives us more hours of reading since we can re-read it and different choices change up the story, and how it all plays out.
Well then I guess the only thing wrong with the book is it has an ending to it . . .
In all seriousness great job on the writing. The hinterlands addition was great, it was slow at the beginning, but I think having it purposefully slow made the payoff that much more sweet at the end for me, and I love how crazy the story got near the ending of the 2nd third. The plot twists were insane.
All the characters are very well written and I am impressed at how you guys managed to get me invested into the story so easily.
I also like the poems and aesthetics added.
Keep up the great work.
Also, I should add, I found a technical error within the story. When Greta Mentions that the labyrinth summoning ability defies "thermodynamics". Thermodynamics is the study of heat and heat transfer, she should say "The laws of physics" because one of the laws of physics states that you can't create or destroy matter.
This is more of a suggestion than anything else:
Once the story is over, and the last third is done could you maybe send it into some sort of randomized interactive hotel game, where you can just interact with the other NPCs, and somewhat keep the charade going for a little bit? The game/novel is really well done, and I genuinely enjoyed my first playthrough through of the game/novel. It was well-paced, well-written, and I genuinely got invested in the characters. I couldn't complete all the missions though, which was a shame, and having a bunch of extra days, and maybe some random interaction events after the story arcs are over, would just be nice to have, maybe even some off-shoot mini-games with the characters would be nice too. It doesn't have to always be super new stuff either, just stuff to sort of tide-over the player, and make things go slower, after the arc is done, maybe even the illusion that life is going on so you can complete the other tasks at hand.
Just my 2 cents though.
