I loved most scenes (not a fan of smoking); and most dialogue (not a fan of the mocking the cyborg). But the pacing and flow from one scene to another was lacking, IMO. It didn't feel like a complete story to me - the scenes lacked the feeling of being built onto each other, and like it wasn't doing it to intentional effect.
Anyway, I really apprenticed the expressiveness of your characters. The language used was so damn clear. I just love it when a work's intent is comprehensible.
The music was really fabulous. It really set the moods. The character designs were great too.
I think it would be good to progress these characters even more. That would solve my woes, I hope.