Hey SmokeAndAsh, thanks for the opportunity to experience a piece of your own story through this game. The writing was easily some of the best I've seen in any recent game jam, and I was quickly able to identify with the main characters. The amount of personality you were able to build into each NPC is really impressive.
On top of that, the unique art style and cutscene animations added a lot of flavor. I also like how the largely grayscale color scheme helps reflect the solemn mood and "lack of feeling" mentioned by the main character.
If you have a chance to add on to this game later, one thing that I'd love to see are portraits added to the dialogue box in order to see the face of the person who's talking. This would be especially helpful in cutscenes with 3+ people.
Finally, I also wanted to mention how cool it is that dialogue choices allow you to change the story a bit, which helps each person's playthrough feel more personal. The amount of dialogue you were able to write in such a short jam is impressive on its own, but the fact that you also wrote alternate lines and branching dialogue trees is amazing.
Thanks again for sharing this experience, and please keep us posted if you release a new version at some point. I'll definitely be excited to see more about this project, or whatever you're planning to release next!