Ahoy there!
Very cool concept! I ended up dying early on because I wanted to check what was behind me while trying to get home, I'll have to play again and see how far I get in the future :) This is only your second visual novel? This is very good and impressive for a second attempt.
I have to say also, the art of the characters is fabulous. Looking at previous comments, yes, yes you did a great job with this one!
To improve next time, it might helpful to change the font. Unfortunately I struggled to read it. I have made a few visual novel projects with Tyranobuilder, but I find the software ends up struggling a lot and corrupts itself. It might be worth while looking into alternatives such as Ren'py for future projects.
All the best, keep dev'ing! Lovely ideas, great submission :)