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I'm quite enjoying this story! It has a really interesting and original concept that doesn't feel like it's just a copy of what a bunch of other IFs are already doing. Your writing style is engaging and though there's a few spelling mistakes and incorrect phrases, I'm still thoroughly invested in the world you've created.
... and that sex scene near the start of the game (that dictates your sexuality?). Whoa. Hot! Very *chef's kiss* - you have a talent for writing smut and I can't wait to see more. :D :D

Three things (?) I thought I'd mention. 
First, although the Warden being (fake) blind is an awesome concept, it seems hard to believe anyone would actually believe the Warden could kill ANY monster blind (as they think he is) when he can't even get around the city blind, or at least struggles to. If the Warden used some sort of magical means (like a sonar/echo-locating spell) to assist him through the city, thus having no issue being misdirected or bumping into things, people would just assume he uses magic to 'see', and that he uses that same magic to help him 'see' while fighting monsters, and so wouldn't question his blindness at all. THEN it would actually be alarming for the Warden if anyone seriously hinted he was faking it, especially if they could sense the magic rolling off the Warden - so much so that the Warden might be seriously on edge around that person.
As it currently is I'm surprised everyone seeing him be assisted or randomly stumbling into walls isn't seriously doubting how he could possibly hit anything, let alone kill a formidable monster. lol

Second, I'm playing a stoic/cold/closed yet confident (including with sex) male character, but there are no real "flirt" options that fit such a personality. one is shy, one is bold, and the third is sort of jumpy and nervous. As a result I only have the choice to either not flirt at all and miss out on the ROs (which sucks cos MC is horny and secretly wants that good lovin lol), or to break character just to get one of them. I realize it's a lot to ask, but is there any chance you could add an option that specifies an unexpected/unwanted sexual attraction, or sexual tension, indicating our MC is interested in the person despite themselves?

Lastly, in the scene where you're in Hestia's house, just before she joins your expedition, would it be possible to add an option not to react at all when you learn of the spirits crowding around your character, or pretend it doesn't bother you even if it secretly does? Both the existing options or excitement or panicking are a little dramatic if roleplaying a stoic/cold character (funny though - especially the panicking one!).

Anyway, hopefully you read this far (if so, thanks for bearing with me). All in all this is a really great start so far, and I'm looking forward to all future updates! :)

EDIT: OH! And one thing I forgot to mention, I LOVE the character customization. I don't think I've ever gotten an option for nipple or genital piercings, but I'm here for it (and chose them, of course! lol). <3

First, I'm sorry for responding a little late, but thank you! I appreciate any feedback. To clarify, the first sex scene doesn't determine your sexuality. You just choose what you prefer. I was originally going to make it a determining variable, but I decided not to since you choose the gender of most ROs (I hope my thoughts on this make sense).

Now, onto your points!

1. I have rectified this for the most part. Navigating isn't so grand with magic, but you'll rely on the walking stick like you should have been. I don't want to do magic for this because the MC has only been in Auris for around two years. Before that, they lived in Lenia where magic is still a death sentence.

I could say, "The magic you use is undetectable," but I feel like that'd be too easy, not to mention being too perfect could have raised eyebrows (similar to how the MC is meticulous with dressing). My thoughts are the MC is used to it this way, and magic can be exhausting (I have clarified this in certain scenes), and I honestly just don't want to do it like that.

Before, my original thinking was the MC accepts help for various reasons, such as getting places quicker, seeming unsuspecting, etc. But it happened too much and without reason.

Because I brought it up, you might be curious about fighting in Lenia and how you used your magic there, but these things will be explained in time. But anyway, I hope my reasonings on this make sense!

2. The third option of the flirts is "hesitant". I'm not against adding a fourth option that's a lot more stoic, but if I do, it won't be until after Chapter 3.

3. I have made this an option :)

Thank you again for your feedback!