I like what I'm reading so far but, I feel that the writing. could be improved... I feel that some parts are worded a bit awkwardly but I'm not that good or proficient at grammar/English so maybe it could just be me lol.
Also, I don't know if I missed anything but I believe that Damin had not personally introduced themselves yet or that we knew of their name anywhere before meeting them, but the text just casually mentions their name as if we already knew their name?
Nevertheless I hope you don't take any offense to my comment, it's not my intentions to .. I really like what you have going here and I'm looking forward to the final product :)