This definitely feels like it's still a work in progress, and I ran into some stuff that felt like it might be an error--for instance, after you go to bed at the inn, it replays the scene with the dragon tamer, and then the next scene is you waking up, which doesn't seem right. The sound and graphics also have an in-progress feel. But I hope you'll keep working on it, because it has the potential to become a fun little story.
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Thanks for the feedback!
This definitely feels like it’s still a work in progress
Yeah, there’s quite a few things I didn’t have time to do during September.
Most obviously, the road to Meadowport was a path in a forest near my grandma’s home, photographed during the jam, in September, so there wasn’t any snow, so I tried to draw in some snow without even bothering to remove the leaves from the trees… yeah, I definitely should make a better background for that part of the story.
The lack of music outside Meadowport is another result of the lack of time. And I wonder how many players get to hear the lyrics.
And I should add sprites. I was running out of time and thought backgrounds without sprites would look better than sprites without backgrounds.
after you go to bed at the inn, it replays the scene with the dragon tamer
that’s supposed to be a nightmare… but yeah, I should have made that more obvious. Perhaps I could have added some vignetting effect or something. And if I add sprites for the characters I’d be able to replace them with silhouettes on the “replay” to make it more obvious that it’s in the past, or make the colours messy in some way that’s hopefully obviously on purpose.
And speaking of the dragon tamer dialogue, maybe I should add the voice acting to the first dragon tamer scene so that it doesn’t seem like there isn’t going to be VA (there is some later on, mostly in the middle of the story.
But I hope you’ll keep working on it, because it has the potential to become a fun little story.
Thanks! I will keep working on it, probably mostly on the music and art, since I had to go with quite a few compromises on those fronts. I can also tweak the text, but since I already have some VA recorded and added into the VN, there are parts (I’m thinking of those that aren’t my own voice) of the text that I might want to keep mostly the way they are other than to fix obvious mistakes such as typos.