To be frank the grammatical and spelling errors kinda put me off. The game itself still has potential and the potential ROs be lookin good. I'll be waiting for the new updates
I'll be brutally honest too, it's not just the grammar. The jokes feel off (like the one where you invite your boss to play video games at home as a form of flirting?) and then his rejection is even worse..
Then there's weird use of phrases like "I was so scared I didn't even flinch".
Now one bad joke and an error every once in a while is excusable but it got to a point where I had to stop playing.
I'll also say one more thing, this can't be fully fixed with a competent editor as the problems are in the story itself too. (like roomy trying to murder you then mc falling asleep and it's like nothing happened).
But yes, the fantasy setting and the characters look good. It just needs to be heavily polished. Edgy fiction REALLY needs to have very few grammar mistakes as it otherwise turns into cringe very fast.
I also hope to read it again after it's hopefully polished and edited.
Sorry if it's a bit too negative.