This has a great magic system that's involved but took me a bit to figure out, so a clearer tutorial would've been nice for that.
Unfortunately, that is all but negated by the atrocious grammar. It makes the story a struggle to follow as it's very distracting. I would recommend finding an editor to help clear it up. Also, you have this huge town to explore (if you ignore the plot trying to rush you on) with nothing in it. I was highly disappointed in that and was hoping for more.