I thought this was a simple, but well-written, story. You have nice word choice (seriously, "influenza gray"? You don't see that every day!) I liked your pictures, too, but sometimes they made it hard to read the text (especially that gold one, after leaving the whale). That line "PREORDER A WHALEBONE — 15% GOES TO CONSERVATION EFFORTS" made me laugh. (btw, what did you mean by being a pessimist? Where was the pessimism? In the 15% off line?)
(I'm in this Twiny Jam too! My game is HCF. Check it out?)