I'm admittedly not much of a fan of the... style(?) of writing, it just kinda goes and goes and just tells us everything. The random dialogue in the shower about stuck up gay people is... frankly bizarre? it's 2007, if you're going to a gay bar the people there are probably more likely to be supportive and get along with you no matter your differences than be pretentious?? It just makes the main character come off like an incel to be honest. Not to mention the wild jump between deeply serious conversation and right back to being horny? Felt more like "ah we've gotta fill the sex quota." It's unfortunate, I think it could've been an interesting opportunity to explore what expecting a hook up and getting something else might look like. It might have also left more room to explore that... loss of wanderlust, and the whole bit about God, which feels very shoehorned in at the end. I do like the simplistic look of the early finished cgs. The low detail is a good look. Not to complain more... but the music is atrocious. Or at least, the song that he plays on his mp3 player? It's... it's bad bad. Like it's really bad. The fake screaming, the way that it makes it hard to read due to the talking in the background (especially if you're reading it out loud). It drove me insane, I had to mute it.
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The writing style I was going for was something more artistic, particularly with the prose. The VN could have just been describing the events directly, but not much happens in the story, so that would have been boring. The prose is supposed to focus more on how the protagonist is feeling at any given time and give a more intimate experience. It's definitely not for everyone and I had people tell me they didn't like this style.
I don't think it's unrealistic for him to feel about that way for the gay people he met in bars. He lived in a big cosmopolitan city, so that sort of behavior was more common among inhabitants. Different areas have different cultures after all. They also weren't just talking about guys they met in clubs and bars.
For the switch between serious and horny, that's kind of the point? The protagonist isn't emotionally mature enough to deal with these issues directly so he has to distract himself with sex and horniness to avoid them.
The mention of God is supposed to be symbolic of the VN's main themes. I'll just leave it at that. I'll admit, I can see why it's a bit sudden since there's barely any mention of it beforehand.
Glad you like how some of the art looks at least.
I was struggling to find a singer for that song who had the right vocals I wanted. Unfortunately, it wasn't quite what I wanted. I initially was going to put a radio filter on the song, but I didn't want to waste the efforts of both the singer and the composer by filtering their work so I left it as is. I'll do something about the song in a later update maybe.
I'm just explaining myself, I'm not trying to convince you to like it. I'm glad you put in the time to read it anyways, even if you didn't like it. Thanks for the feedback and have a good day.