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A jam submission

tlotlView game page

Unique horror story
Submitted by anymorener (@anymorener), roverNemeZiS, Ljodatal — 10 minutes, 38 seconds before the deadline
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Results

CriteriaRankScore*Raw Score
Overall#24.1254.125
Story#24.4174.417
Creativity#24.4174.417
Theme#34.4174.417
Horror#33.9173.917
Presentation#84.3334.333
Gameplay#143.2503.250

Ranked from 12 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.

Which Theme did you choose?

Lady of the Lake

How did you implement your chosen Theme into your game?
Our new landlady has very peculiar photorealistic wallpaper depicting a quiet lake in the forest.

Did you implement any of the Bonus Challenges and if so, which ones?
1 - there is a cabin near the lake
2 - there is a description of a figure in the distance
3 - we can fish once

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Comments

(+2)

really like the art in this! 

Developer

Thanks!

Submitted (1 edit) (+1)

Notes from gameplay:

- Nice main menu. The font is engaging and I love how choices change color when highlighted

- Nice job with controls details. Self-voicing is weirdly in a different font

- Font for game text could be better. Feels very default

- Past tense feels weird to me for an interactive game, present tense (I enter vs I entered, The paint is crumbling vs the paint was crumbling) inserts readers more directly into the story

- Nice use of overlaid character art on the background

- Great consistent art style!

- The writing overall could be punched up a bit. It feels a bit rushed, and there are grammar/spelling issues which hinder reading. The core thoughts, however, are really interesting and compelling! Eg the scene about looking into other windows introduces some interesting thoughts.

- Issues with tense shifting from past to present and back again (eg I have to find a plumber)

- Cute animation of woman sliding down the hoarding pile

- Nice use of sound effects

- Good use of screen shake when reeling fish in

- Nice mystery established with tlotl

- Overall plot is a bit rambling, improving the writing would make it easier for the reader to go along for the ride

- Figure moving closer is nice scene

- Not many choices for the player

Overall this a great kafka-esque story, but it would benefit from tightening up the writing and inserting more choices for the player. I loved the creepy vibe and surreal tone, but I think a few more branching options along the way would make it more engaging - as is, players mostly just click through the story without much to do. Excellent work with adding sound details to specific scenes!

Developer(+1)

Thank you for your analysis and paying a lot of attention to details! We're glad you met the woman on the pile.  Some decisions unfortunately were made in a hurry.  We are planning on improving the story.

Submitted

I think you're off to a really great start - the UI in particular was very clean and well-done. I hope you continue work on this!

Submitted(+1)

Nice work! The story kept me engaged until the end and I enjoyed seeing the different endings :) I think my favorite sequences were the dream sequences as well as the moment when the landlady breaks into the house at night. Really well done!

Developer

Thank you! We're glad you found it engaging!

(+1)

Omg that was really cool! I love the atmosphere and the transitions between reality and what it feels like a dream where interestingly well made! I love the whole surreal atmosphere. 

Developer (1 edit) (+1)

Thank you for playing!
 

Submitted(+1)

Oh really liked this story, pulls you right in from the start and doesn't beat around the bush at all! Was hooked! :D 

Developer(+1)

Thanks!

Submitted(+1)

I'm a bit biased because I LOVE VNs but this is easily one of my favorite games to this jam so far. Very peculiar and curiously written. The art accompanied the dizzy-fying feeling of this story very well. I played for one ending. Loved how all bonus challenges were incorporated into the plotline. Well done everyone.

Developer(+1)

Thank you! It's  really surprising to hear that!

Submitted(+2)

Really enjoyed this. The art was both familiar and unique, I liked the weight of your lines and use of perspective, felt very personal and the story was well written. 

Developer(+2)

Thank you! You are too generous.