This is...strange. The writing is a mixture of terribly juvenile and pleasantly wholesome. The vore itself is...hard to put into words, as it's constantly broken up by largely out of place dialogue that's indicative that this person's never had a real relationship; only seen them on reality TV. People don't talk like that, and I don't mean the lovey-dovey flirting. Overall, this is just...eh.
Nice art-style and well I know it stays it's short it is really short and not a whole porn but those are pretty much my only complaints.
So cute! Very well written, love all the different body options, really helps you get in the mood while allowing you to set boundaries. I'm definitely excited for parts 2 and 3 now!