Hi there! I like the spoke-and-hub form of this poem. While I usually don't really like rhyming poetry, it worked well in this piece. If you're considering expanding upon this poem, it might be cool if you made the lines change/the sub-poems change based on order of previously accessed passages, so it felt like your actions affected the flow of the poem more. Anyway, nice work!
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