UI

The main menu is very clean, very simple, works quite well overall. The game ui is fairly simplistic and i believe its the default for Ren'Py so nothing special there. Save and load slots aren't that pretty. The pref tab is also kinda ugly with the default sliders. Additionally the text speed is defaulted to max, this makes the game less lively feeling, should have it build rather than be instant by default.

Writing

The story is really good, keeps me interested and immersed. No feedback since I like it.

Visuals

The backgrounds arent too great in my opinion, im not sure if you made them but theres not much consistency. Character art is nice and simple, works well.

Animations

Not much happening here. The characters are rather static, scenes dont move around much, you could find many ways to make it more interesting.

Sound

The music is quite nice for the story, but thats all there is, its a visual novel, not a book, you can add loads of sound effects, ambience and the like to truly immerse a reader!

Overall its a nice game, good work, you got a lot of things you could improve on and make it a great game.