I like this mournful story: its pacing is great, the breaks are well placed. The story's narration is somewhat comforting in a way, as if told over a campfire or bed. Fairytale-esque I'd say.

The piece has the same problem as your last submission, "Predator." The theme, whilst present, seems to get swept away. I can see the theme here, but it's more like an undertone.

Overall, I still love your work. I can't wait to see what comes next from you!

I liked this tale. Lots of neat plot points to attach your attention to, the journey, the separation, the attraction.

This was well done and a good use of literary references (historical and OPR lore) without being too oblique about it - nice!

Clever pun. I appreciate throughline of the work, and the use of repetition in the beginning.

Very clever name

The story was well written and easy to follow.