| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Adherence to the Theme | #15 | 3.700 | 3.700 |
| Overall | #18 | 3.611 | 3.611 |
| Concept & Originality | #20 | 3.700 | 3.700 |
| Flow & Clarity | #21 | 3.433 | 3.433 |
Ranked from 30 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
This gave me some serious Hag house in the forest kind of vibe and more than delivered on the creepy vibe that such a story should have. The build up was well done and the use of environment to support the tone was excellent.
If I was going to ask for anything with it, it would have been to know a bit more about the environment to better support said tone, but doing so with the assigned word limit is very hard to do. Either way, loved it!
I love it, it feels like an old fairytale, the desciption of the beigns of the house seems a little lacking, but it may be that I read it a little too rapid because the story scare me a little
Oh I love it!!
It reads like one of the old fairy tales. A house by the woods, two siblings, witches, and the moral to never enter a house without invitation!
Great pacing! Such an ominous, horrific feel throughout.
Present tense was a good choice here, but there were a few places where you used a past tense verb, which tended to throw me out of the story. Other small editing issues, too, which I'm sure would have been caught if there'd been more time!
Good use of the theme, and good brother/sister dynamic. Well done!
Thanks for taking the time to read the story! I made this piece in a rush so it's not the most polished but thank you for pointing out where I could've improved the piece, I plan on uploading a more polished version of it when the jam is over. I'm glad that you liked the pacing as I thought I struggled a bit there given the word limit.
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