I found this story conflicting. I loved reading each entry individually, and the entries were quite compelling; however, when put together as a whole, I felt they became convoluted by the "timestamps." They were more distracting than immersive without some form of reference to what they meant.

I thought your format was excellent. I also really liked your usage of the word salvoes. I don't hear it often. 

really great story! eternal dynasty forever!

I really like the haiku at the end. Really good stuff especially the whole samurai aesthetic.

You did a fine job evoking the samurai culture of the Dynasty, and the story's spare and precise prose worked well as a complement to that. I especially appreciated the appending of a haiku to a drone report. Some of the details of the story events and the captain's motivations I found hard to follow, though. Still, overall a good reflection on the course of a life.

A fantastically handled short story that sets up both an interesting character and provides many hooks for the universe as a whole. Fully embracing the Samurai style of the Dynasty gave them a lot of character (They even had a death Haiku!) and contrasts them well with the other factions they are fighting. 
My only request would be if there could be a way to add a bit of clarity to the different time jumps. Just more for layout than anything. 
Love it!

I loved the Samurai motif, right down to the death haiku. Could use a little more clarity on what is a log and what is inside his own thoughts, but overall, not a bad read.

There were strong moments here that really lent to the action and tone of the story. The choice to frame Takai's reflection to be part of a mission report may feel weird to some readers but I think it was done well enough in a believable way.  I really like how you also fleshed out other factions by perceiving them through the lens of an Eternal Dynasty captain. 

I also appreciate that there's a certain level of self-awareness to Takai in the line "Learn of the threats to their oppressive benevolence." It could've been just a throwaway line but it adds another layer of nuance to the character. Nicely done!

Good use of descriptions---some passages were quite evocative! I think you could have dialed way back on your use of the name "Captain Takai", though. Many times, "the captain" or "Takai" or even just a pronoun would have sufficed to add some variety. But I really liked the glimpses of his life and what was meaningful to him, and your hints at how (over the course of his life) he was cooperating with former enemies was nicely done.

Very nicely done story, I enjoyed the world-building that you accomplished not just for the Dynasty, but also fitting in other factions. Good pacing, enjoyable tale.