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Prayer of consequence final's itch.io pageResults
Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
Adherence to Theme | #47 | 3.059 | 3.120 |
Flow & Clarity | #57 | 2.628 | 2.680 |
Overall | #60 | 2.863 | 2.920 |
Concepts & Originality | #62 | 2.903 | 2.960 |
Ranked from 25 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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The writing felt cluttered and rushed towards the end, which is an issue that I felt came from the heavy usage of speaking characters within the work. Other than that, you worked very hard to fit the theme into the story. It felt a little forced at times, but with the word limit and theme being so broad for this jam, I totally understand why one would work to really push the message behind the story.
Marvelous use of the theme!
Marvelous use of the theme!
It was a very easy read. I really liked how you managed to turn the theme into a prayer.
"sis-tem". Hilarious. Complaints about this tale? I have nun.
Good story! As feedback, I'd say, take care of tenses; the story was mostly in present tense, but some parts switched to past tense and back to present. Aside from that, separating different voices in dialogues into new lines really helps the reader understand who's speaking, without needing to clarify too much. One character speaks, the other replies in the line below, and so on.
Good one. Glad you got it sorted out.
not seeing any PDF, did you remove it?
check again?not sure why it's not visible its listed as public
Nothing here?
check again, not sure why it's not listed.