Judge Feedback:

Seems like a fun dungeon crawl with some interesting narrative possibilities. I would love to see deeper adventure hooks/suggested outcomes for it.

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I wanted a little more lore overall. Is this community part of a bigger world of Alfs or is this an isolated pocket? Who are the players - far off visitors, members of the community, or is that up to each group to decide?

I did not know whether this dungeon was supposed to fit a specific system or be system agnostic. 

I liked the story of the hourglass and that being the central object of interest.

I liked all of the creatures!

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Map was beautiful, good 1 page dungeon keying. Liked the aurora bats and specific use of Shadowdark's torch timer.