i knew basically nothing about either luis or tot going in, so i really appreciated the preface with the links to the irms, it was super helpful! im sure my lack of knowledge will have changed by the time i reach the end of this comment :p i love a fic collection, ill go through each chapter in my comment, so it might get long!
the best story that i could ever tell: i loved this piece, partially because i love any blaseball fic where you can only get the whole picture by knowing what the characters don’t. its such a fascinating conversation to read with the context of whats coming. the dialogue flows really naturally, and you do a really good job at covering a bunch of topics without it seeming forced. you can really feel the ease of their relationship, and how well they know each other. i particularly enjoyed how casual they were discussing death, that felt really real
lost in the cosmos, lonely: god. luis just vanishing on the other end of the call. godddd. i love the imagery of using tot leaving voicemails, it is such a good way to set boundaries on the fic while making it really impactful. because holy shit. im so curious about your hcs on ascension as well, there are just enough little clues scattered through this to make me really fascinated. wailing and crying at ‘stay safe, my dear heart’
and i know it well: hehe hi nagomi nava… i liked this a lot, i felt like a really good follow-up in the sense of setting up tots character once luis’ absence is starting to be less of an open wound but still absolutely present in tots mind. it shows that development really well. coffee cup is so interesting to me in terms of players thoughts n feelings about it, so i really enjoyed reading this and getting it from tots perspective. loved the way you wrote the coffee effects as well! it was a lovely interlude
so i can forget how lonely feels: aaaaaa….them….. that moment of return was so sweet i am holding them so gently. this whole thing is literally. shaking them. romance.
before the end of the movie: i love how all of these pieces are really representative of their relationship and how it reacts to a whole bunch of situations, it really helps to build a picture of them together. i love how you write the two of them, how they bounce off of each other in a way that makes their love so clear.
to think that we could stay the same: i really love arturo and tots friendship. it is a bright spot in this absolutely brutal section, incredible job at wrecking my emotions. all the memorials are so lovely to think about, and so heartbreaking at the same time. i love the sense of community in this chapter, the hope in that despite the tragedy.
if & when: had to go take a break before reading this bc i knew what was coming and hall reunions always make me o|-<. im so glad theyre together at the end of the world, this was such a wonderful and neat end to their story, shoutout to the sim and shoutout to you for writing it all so beautifully. aaaah!!!
wahoo i can say i am a luistot understander now !! this was really amazing, it was so wonderful to have the fics laid out in a way that made such a clear story for their relationship. you do dialogue and character voice so well, it really built up a sense of realness in all of the different relationships in this little universe. also! the formatting was super cute and professional looking, awesome job. waugh. them.
thank you so so much for this super sweet comment 🦐💜💜 waaaugh. SO very happy to have brought another blaseball fan into the luistot understanders fold!! im always happy to hear relationship dynamics have gotten across well- they shrimply love each other so much, is the thing, and building out tot's relationships to some of the other garages was another aspect of this fic i REALLY enjoyed writing. thank you again auuuu!!
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i knew basically nothing about either luis or tot going in, so i really appreciated the preface with the links to the irms, it was super helpful! im sure my lack of knowledge will have changed by the time i reach the end of this comment :p i love a fic collection, ill go through each chapter in my comment, so it might get long!
the best story that i could ever tell: i loved this piece, partially because i love any blaseball fic where you can only get the whole picture by knowing what the characters don’t. its such a fascinating conversation to read with the context of whats coming. the dialogue flows really naturally, and you do a really good job at covering a bunch of topics without it seeming forced. you can really feel the ease of their relationship, and how well they know each other. i particularly enjoyed how casual they were discussing death, that felt really real
lost in the cosmos, lonely: god. luis just vanishing on the other end of the call. godddd. i love the imagery of using tot leaving voicemails, it is such a good way to set boundaries on the fic while making it really impactful. because holy shit. im so curious about your hcs on ascension as well, there are just enough little clues scattered through this to make me really fascinated. wailing and crying at ‘stay safe, my dear heart’
and i know it well: hehe hi nagomi nava… i liked this a lot, i felt like a really good follow-up in the sense of setting up tots character once luis’ absence is starting to be less of an open wound but still absolutely present in tots mind. it shows that development really well. coffee cup is so interesting to me in terms of players thoughts n feelings about it, so i really enjoyed reading this and getting it from tots perspective. loved the way you wrote the coffee effects as well! it was a lovely interlude
so i can forget how lonely feels: aaaaaa….them….. that moment of return was so sweet i am holding them so gently. this whole thing is literally. shaking them. romance.
before the end of the movie: i love how all of these pieces are really representative of their relationship and how it reacts to a whole bunch of situations, it really helps to build a picture of them together. i love how you write the two of them, how they bounce off of each other in a way that makes their love so clear.
to think that we could stay the same: i really love arturo and tots friendship. it is a bright spot in this absolutely brutal section, incredible job at wrecking my emotions. all the memorials are so lovely to think about, and so heartbreaking at the same time. i love the sense of community in this chapter, the hope in that despite the tragedy.
if & when: had to go take a break before reading this bc i knew what was coming and hall reunions always make me o|-<. im so glad theyre together at the end of the world, this was such a wonderful and neat end to their story, shoutout to the sim and shoutout to you for writing it all so beautifully. aaaah!!!
wahoo i can say i am a luistot understander now !! this was really amazing, it was so wonderful to have the fics laid out in a way that made such a clear story for their relationship. you do dialogue and character voice so well, it really built up a sense of realness in all of the different relationships in this little universe. also! the formatting was super cute and professional looking, awesome job. waugh. them.
thank you so so much for this super sweet comment 🦐💜💜 waaaugh. SO very happy to have brought another blaseball fan into the luistot understanders fold!! im always happy to hear relationship dynamics have gotten across well- they shrimply love each other so much, is the thing, and building out tot's relationships to some of the other garages was another aspect of this fic i REALLY enjoyed writing. thank you again auuuu!!