I just started playing, but as with the other games I’ll start adding my feedback gradually. I don’t remember how the original matchstick tale goes, so I’m just going candid on this one!

EDIT: I continued until 2nd matchstick, going well! EDIT: I continued until 3rd matchstick, getting interesting esp. past revelations and character evolution! EDIT: I continued until 4th matchstick, just added typo EDIT: I reached one ending!

Overall

• interesting premise. Maybe the start felt a bit slow to me, but it was clear what the MC’s problem and what their mental state are

UI

• when no name is displayed, the text feels too low where there are 3 lines, it should be offset up a little. But I noticed that’s a common issue with Renpy dialog box I had myself… I only “fixed” this on my previous games by moving the name box higher so it doesn’t eat the dialog box too much… Otherwise, you may need a condition in the dialog box screen to change offset based on whether a name exists or not (see last screenshot on game page)
• one of the sentences seem to go over 3 lines, it ends with “all you pull up” suddenly, I think the 4th line is hidden because it went below the screen

• History: the text bleeds to the right (need to increase right margin/padding)

Animation

• when Claude disappears (at least the second time) there are 2 flickers before the final fade out. Maybe 0 or 1 flicker would be enough.

Choices

• in the first choice, if you choose to “push him back” it has no visible effect as you immediately join the common branch (also met by the other choice). It may be nice to have a few sentences about trying to push him back, whether it actually succeeds or not (e.g. you try to push him but your hands go through his body, ugh)

Text

• “You hesitated for a moment longer” -> from this sentence until “you needed to figure out the truth”, the tense suddenly becomes past whereas it was present before, and becomes present again after.
• “How did we meet and… fall in love..?” -> only dots at the end, since “…” turns to ellipsis and not “..” it doesn’t look intentional
• “they stood out–a moth among butterflies -> may be better with space around dash, to avoid reading “out-a” like a word Interestingly, I though “a moth among butterflies” was a joke as I had a worse image of moths than butterflies. I checked a few pictures esp. of white moth and I can see the beauty now though.
• about making up stories-they could change -> same remark on dash and space (in fact, the other dashes in previous sentences had them right)
• Some’s chasing me -> someone’s chasing me?
• Your head spings. Just this morning you could barely stand anything to do with the guy => technically MC was really annoyed yesterday, they were quite enthusiast that morning I think
• You hadn’t meant to say those things allowed -> “out loud” or “aloud”
• “and whisper the verse verse of words” => double “verse”

Flow/Progression

• the matchstick count is quite good for progression, it allows me to save and have a break after each matchstick while having a feeling I advance steadily

Audio

• angry crowd SFX doesn’t loop perfectly